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*andre drives toward a sunset*
*credits start rolling*
directors voice:*angry* we haven't finished yet!!
stage hands voice: oops sorry
*credits disappear*

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Scene 25
Alley at hospital back exit

*Van drives in and stops*
Neva: Why did we park here?
Andre: I hate to say it, but we can't keep this van. It's just way too suspicious. Yi Ze, get the tech stuff out ouf here and prepare the ambulance van with it. We'll take it for escaping.
Yi Ze: OK, but I need some help.
Andre: OK, Sani and Neva can help you, and I'm going in with Yoshi. We're getting Morton out of there.
*Both sneak in through the staff door*

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scene 26
inside the hospital

*andre and the others hide in a storage room and wait for some staff to come past*
Andre: *whispers*after 3.  1, 2, 3, go
*they jump the staff and steal their clothes*
Andre: lets go before anyone sees us

who was andre with in the van?

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Scene 26 continued
Location: Inside the hospital

Andre: OK, Yoshi, follow me. Everybody else, go, please, and set up the van for escape.
*Andre and Yoshi walk upstairs and meet Nurse 1*
Nurse 1: It's an emergency! Doctor... (looks at the name on the clothes) ...Stainer, come here, please.
*Both follow the nurse*
Nurse 1 (while walking): Our security people saw a guy attempting to kill one of our patients. That guy escaped upstairs, and all exits are locked by the alarm system.
*They walk into a room, where is Morton; he looks really sick*
Nurse 1: That... criminal made an injection of MDMA to this patient, but luckily, he dropped the syringe before he could complete the injection, as he got spotted. The dose could otherwise have been deadly. The hair analysis shows that the patient doesn't take any narcotics, so the MDMA was surely a murder attempt, not a help in getting the regular dose.
*Yoshi picks the syringe up and takes with him*
Andre: Bring the patient out to the back exit, a rescue team will bring him away. We need him at our research center. I'm afraid there might be some allergic reactions. (To Yoshi) You go with her. (Whispers) Drive away and wait at the corner, I'll get Nasli.
*Andre goes upstairs to seek for Nasli, Yoshi and Nurse 1 bring Morton to the van (on his hospital bed on wheels), and everybody (except Andre) drive away; Nurse 1 goes back in and sees the real Dr. Stainer beaten up and bound to the wall*
Dr. Stainer: Help me!
Nurse 1: Who are you?
Dr Stainer: Dr. Stainer! That freak stole my clothing! And look at the rest of us!
*The room is full of people without the special medic clothing, just in casual trousers and shirts they wear under it*
Nurse 1: That was probably together with the killer... and they kidnapped the patient!
Dr. Stainer: What the f***?! What killer?! Now get me off here!
*Nurse 1 calls 911 and frees the doctors*

Scene 27
Location: On the hospital roof

Nasli: You won't catch me!
Andre: We'll see!
*A pursuit begins; Andre chases Nasli. Nasli finally leaps to another building, Andre follows him, but falls down and into a dumpster*
Andre: Ouch...
*Andre gets out and runs to the van with their friends, then drives away*
For GV (and for anybody who's contributing), I made a list.
Our friends (currently in the van):

• Andre - owner of 110mb High School
• Yi Ze - a girl with contacts to an army
• Neva - a blonde girl they helped get out of prison
• Yuri - ex-girlfriend/ex-wife of Morton
• Yoshi - Morton's high school friend
• Sani - a crazy guy
• Morton - Yoshi's friend

Others:

• Auberta - daughter of Morton; gamer; has special powers, like immunity from explosions
• Eve - Sani's girlfriend
• Natsu - murderer of Andre's ex-girlfriend, highly dangerous
• Nasli - Neva's ex-boyfriend; really bad guy
• Yuri (M) - brother of Yuri

EDIT: Found Natsu in an earlier post. Updated his character description.

So, Nasli got away, Morton is full of MDMA (extasy), and the cops are after their van... Have fun continuing it!

[The Melancholy Of 110mb.com]

Scene 28
Location: In the Van


Andre: cant you drive faster?
Neva: No, i can not why? were far enuogh from the cops right now why waste the limited amount of gas?
Andre: because im hungery... *Stomach growls*
Morton: AHHHHH MY HEAD AHHHHHH *due to the stomach*
Neva: ok... hmmm i have a granola bar...
Andre: that wont do any good... i just chased after some freak remeber?
Neva: Oh, ok then... *Neva hits the brakes surprising everyone including the cops and throws into revers spinning around and then quickly drving back were they came from.*
Neva: HOLD ON!!! *Makes a hard right then another hard right up another road then a hard left.*
Andre: erm i dont thing that was a good idea...
Neva: Why?
Morton: AHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Neva: Oh, Opps my bad... Non the less here we are...
*Andre starts staring as the cafe*
im sorry but all i could think of on a empty stomach my self

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Scene 28 continued
Location: Streets of L.A.

*The van makes some nice driving moves, shakes the cops off, turns back and finally stops at the cafe*
Neva: OK, who will get some food for us? Maybe Andre, no, better Yoshi...
*Yoshi's stomach growls*
Neva: No, wait, who isn't hungry here?
*Dead silence*
Neva: OK, then I'll go get you some food myself.
*Neva walks in the cafe*

Scene 29
Location: Cafe

*Neva walks in*
Neva: Hello, what have you...
*Machine gun shots are heard; Nasli is in the cafe and is shooting at the ceiling*
Nasli: Come here, darling!
Neva: Screw you!
*Neva gets an uzi out of her handbag and fires at Nasli's direction, intentionally not hitting him, but certainly scaring him*
Nasli: Hey, hey, what's wrong with you?
*Neva gets out a second uzi and fires like mad at everything in the cafe; everybody duck and cover their eyes. Neva quickly runs into the cafe staff rooms and escapes through the back exit, grabbing a few meal packs from the kitchen, runs around the building and to the van, just to see Nasli firing at the van.*
Neva: Oh s**t...
*Neva fires in Nasli's direction, and he takes cover behind the van, randomly shooting at where he thinks Neva is; meanwhile, Neva goes to the van's side door, opens it, and all friends leave the van, taking most valuable stuff with them, and waking still stoned Morton.*
Neva (whispers): Come with me! Take your food, and let's go to that hotel. *Points at a 3-star hotel.* We need a rest badly.
*Nasli keeps sitting ducked behind the van and firing into nothing.*

Scene 30
Location: Hotel reception

Neva: Hello, we're a tourist group and we would be happy to get some room.
Hotel guy: OK, number 110 is free. Are you paying now, or later?
Neva: I'll pay for 24 hours, but I might extend the time. I'll pay for the additional time later then. We'll see.
Hotel guy: Have a nice stay!

Scene 31
Location: Room 110

Neva: Guess we're safe here. Let's pack our stuff out and have a dinner. We can plan our next actions while eating.
Morton: I don't want to eat. *Kisses Neva.*
Neva: OK... that was unexpected.
Andre: It's because of the MDMA he got...
*Morton starts beating Andre; Yoshi and Sani hold him back.*
Andre: I know, I know. Decreased appetite, increased feelings of intimacy, feeling of hostility around you... that's common with ecstasy. Just don't ask me how do I know.
*Everybody's like 'huh?'.*
Andre: Oh, I see. *Laughs.* No, I have never been a junkie. But I have had some experience with them. Anyways, when am I getting my Hummer back? It's still in Morton's devastated hometown.
Neva: We must find a way there.
Sani: I have an idea...

im sorry but all i could think of on a empty stomach my self

It's OK. Btw, so much red in my post lol.

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scene 32
location: room 110 the next morning

*morton and neva wake up*
*morton is next to neva*
morton: sexy voice* hi neva
*neva screams*
*all the others are woken up
Andre: *angry* WILL YOU STOP THAT
*morton attempts to beat up andre*
bell: ding ding ding
Sani, ooh breakfast
*they scramble to breakfast*

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Scene 32 continued
Location: Room 110, at the breakfast table

Morton: OK, OK, Andre, sorry, now I was just kidding. And Neva, I was yesterday full of the drugs, sorry that I got into your bed... Guess the drug effect is over now. Where are we?
Neva: It's OK. We're in a hotel. In LA.
Morton: And where's Yi Ze?
Andre: She went to get my Hummer limo back.
Sani: Yep, I had an idea how we could do it, and Yi Ze wanted to. She should be back very soon.

Scene 33
Location: Desert

*Yi Ze is driving a cheap car down the desert road, quietly singing to herself, and closing in to Morton's hometown. She parks at Morton's home and gets into the Hummer, takes the keys out, and drives away.*


Scene 34
Location: LA

*Yi Ze parks at the hotel and sees Nasli climbing down into the sewage canal, just next to the hotel.*
Yi Ze: Dammit!
*Yi Ze gets her phone out and calls Andre.*
Yi Ze (in the radio): Get out of there now!!! Nasli is planning something bad. I'll get him! You just get out of the building and get into the Hummer!
Andre (in the radio): Understood.
*Nasli gets out and runs away; Yi Ze runs after him. Nasli stops and turns around.*
Nasli: Too late.
*Nasli presses the detonator*
Yi Ze: Nooo!
*A bomb explodes in the sewage canal system below the hotel. People are running or being carried out of the hotel; Yi Ze is looking for her friends, they are gathering around the Hummer, some are slightly injured.*
Andre: I'm fine. Did'ya get him?
Yi Ze: No, but I'm glad you're OK.
Sani: Look what I got!
*Sani holds a suitcase of Yi Ze's tech stuff.*
Yi Ze: Thanks! Now let's get all in, and leave this place!
*Nasli drives past them in a car.*
Yi Ze: No, wait here! I'l get him.
*Yi Ze takes another car and follows Nasli; a chase begins.*

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scene 35
location: on a highway
*nasli is in this car V*

*meanwhile YI Zi is in this one v

Nasli: sh!t
*Nasli starts shooting at Yi Zi's lotus*
Yi Zi: i could really use another person here
*YI Zi grabs a gun and starts shooting at Nasli*

[M0ZZA]

My friends got a lotus elise 

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scene 35 cont
location:as the last one

*the gun fight goes on for a while*
*one of nasli's tires burst*
Yi Zi: hell yeah!!!
*nasli spins off, crashes and the car explodes*

hey brad why not post a few lines to the play?

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Scene 35 continued
Location: Highway

*Yi Ze drives to Nasli's car to look for Nasli.*
Yi Ze: Nasli? Nasli?
*Police and ambulance sirens sound.*
Yi Ze: Ah well. They'll take care of him... or what's left of him.
*Yi Ze gets in her Elise and leaves.*

Scene 36
Location: Highway

*Yi Ze's car starts making weird sounds and finally stops, she gets out and sees the engine smoking.*
Yi Ze: Damn thing. I will have to walk to the town. Maybe I'll get some car there.
*She walks down a highway offramp and walks to a town. It's 2 PM, the weather is hot, and finally she walks into the shade, in a narrow alley (yep, again ).*
Yi Ze: It's so empty here... where are all the people?
*Suddenly she gets frightened to death and runs away through the alley.*
Yi Ze (while running): I... feel... danger... I... have... to... get... out... of... here... NOW!!!
*Steps are heard behind her, coming closer; she gets deeper and deeper in a weird area of abandoned slum and industrial buildings. Just before he looks back, somebody hits her with something heavy, she falls down and loses consciousness.*

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Scene 36 cont:
location: in a dark alley

*Nasli steps out of the shadows*
*Nasli nudges Yi ZI*
*nothing happens*
Nasli: excellent
*Nasli walks away*

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Scene 37
Location: Some cafe/dinner

*They had to do something while waiting, so they went to the dinner. *
Yuri: Why isn't Yi Ze back? It's 3:15 PM...
Sani: Right. Why not go looking for her?
Yoshi: OK.
Andre: I'm not putting my ride in such a risk. The Hummer nearly blew up!
Sani: You can park it somewhere safe, and let's take that van over there.
Andre: OK, fine.

Scene 38
Location: Highway, close to the accident location

Andre: It seems like there has been an accident... isn't that Nasli's car over there?
Morton: It appears to be it. I'd be lucky to know what happened...
Neva: No problem.
*Neva gets out and walks to an officer.*
Neva: Hi officer!
Officer 1: Hello, young lady!
*Neva almost faints - it's the same cop she knocked down with the GPS device back then.*
Officer 1: Haven't I seen you before?
Neva: No, but... what's happened here?
Officer 1: A car blew up. A tuned red one.
Neva: Any injuries to anybody?
Officer 1: We couldn't find the driver anywhere. Possibly, he ran away. It could have been possible to escape after such an accident, although it's unlikely.
Inspector 1: Officer, come here, please!
Officer 1: Got to go. Duty is calling! *wink*
Neva: Bye!
*Neva walks some 20 meters back and sees tire tracks and blood on the ground. The first tracks lead to the crash site, and have blood on the left side, the other tracks turn around and go back down another highway. Neva gets back in the van.*
Neva: All fine. Nasli's car is totaled, but they didn't find him. Yi Ze seems to have left that way (points at the other highway). I saw blood on the road few meters behind, just to the left of Nasli's tire tracks. That would mean he has jumped out of the car just before the crash.
Morton: Stop talking so smart!
Neva: Why?
Morton: Never mind, let's go!

Scene 39
Location: At the Elise

Andre: Where the heck is Yi Ze?
Morton: Let's go to that town, maybe she's there - it looks like her ride had a breakdown. It's still smoking.
Andre: OK!
*They drive into the small town where Yi Ze is.*

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sorry to bump, had some good ideas
scene 40
location: in town

*everyone except andre and morton go into a cafe
*andre tries to phone Yi Zi*
andre: damn it, no response
Morton:*pointing at someone* look, over there
andre: what?
morton: never mind, i thought i saw her
andre: we'll have a look over there anyway
*they go over there*
*they spot Yi Zi in a dark alley bleeding*

scene 41
location: in a hospital
(viewed from Yi Zi's perspective untill a green star)
*Yi Zi wakes up screen is blurry*
morton: i thought you wouldnt make it
*screen unblurs
andre: its a good thing we found you when we did, a minuite later you would have died
*

scene 42
location at a bus stop
(everyone who is in scene  37, 38 and 39 is here)

andre: lets go home
morton: good idea
*Yi Zi walks on*
Yi Zi: agreed
*a london double decker with openable windows turns up*
*everyone gets on*
*bus pulls away*
andre: what the?!
*Nasli drives up from behind and starts shooting*
andre:*shouting* everyone open a window and shoot
*everyone goes to a window, opens it (or breaks it) and shoots*
*bus goes at top speed*
*gun fight goes on for a while*
*nasli's tire explodes*
*nasli's car goes spinning out of contol, and explodes in a ditch*
*nasli dies in the explosion*
andre: right lets go home
*camera flies out of the back of the bus*
*bus drives into sunset*

the end
thought an ending would be nice, the movie is being made (i think), and now nasli gets killed, so we can end this film here

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Well sounds good but there MUST be a sequel.
(Btw as I lost all my files I have to remake the movie from the start off... but don't worry, I'll do it. )
Lots of stuff went unresolved, for example, Natsu is still free and after our friends. It's unclear what relation has Andre to Neva, why was she in prison, and why is Natsu after Andre. Their lovelife (if there's actually such a word in English ) should also be brought to order, Morton should get his ex back and Sani should finally apologize to Eve what he never did...
Maybe Nasli didn't die. (Stuff like that happens in movies, the villains survive the worst accidents to appear in the sequel, while the good guys die for some 'good cause' or just to make the unrealistic plot more realistic. ) If so, did he change himself (like he did after being kidnapped, but this time to what he was before the incident) and wants Yuri back, but she's going with Morton making him jealous? Or did he team up with Nasli who wants revenge on our friends?
Just a buncha ideas'n'stuff for the sequel. I'm not starting it before I get somewhere with the movie. (But you can, if you want to. It's Mel's play, maybe he should do it.)